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2004-2009高考英语满分作文及名师评析(2)
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2006高考英语满分作文

  【全国卷I】

  【试题回放】

  假定你是李华,亚洲冬季运动会将在你居住的地方举办,现正在招募志愿者,你希望成为其中一员。请按要求用英文给组委会写一封信。内容应包括:1.个人情况:年龄,性别,学历 2.个人条件:英语好,爱好体育,善于交际,乐于助人,熟悉本地情况 3.承诺:提供最佳服务

  注意:词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;生词:申请—apply (v. ), application (n.),志愿者—volunteer

  Dear Sir / Madam:

  I was quite excited when I heard the Asian Winter Games will be held in the city I live. My name is Li Hua. I am an 18-year-old boy student in a senior middle school. And I want to be a volunteer for the games. I like English and sports very much. I like making friends and I am ready to help others. I can be a good interpreter in every sports during the time. Hope the games will be a great success. Hope I will be chosen to be one.

  Yours faithfully,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  这篇文章写得非常流畅,把握了所有要点,同时以“我”为中心,详细说明了自己对志愿者工作的结合,以此来表达自己的决心。由于用词恰当,这种表现就比较充分,具备一定的说服力。词汇和语句的运用也不错。

  [全国卷II]

  【试题回放

  假定你是李华。应英国朋友Bob的要求, 写一封短信介绍你校图书馆的基本情况。内容须包括下面两幅图中的相关信息。

  注意:

  1、字数100左右

  2、可以适当增减细节,以使行文连贯

  3、开头语已为你写好

  Dear Bob,

  Thank you for your last letter asking about our library. Our library locates between the teaching building and our garden. The shape of it seems to be a book to welcome our students. it’s open from Monday to Friday ,and we can borrow the books from 9:00a.m. to 7:00p.m.

  There are many books available in our library ,dealing with almost every subject. Not only the books, but also the magazines can be read here. You may borrow up to five books at a time, and keep them for at most ten days.

  Due to the library , we are offered a place to gain as much knowledge as we can. If you are interested in it, welcome to our school, and I’ll show you around.

  Yours sincerely,

  Li hua

  [名师点评]

  本文最大的特点是描绘仔细而生动,意思表达十分契合。文章以短句为主,兼以长句读起来轻快。文章的体系结构也是常用的三段式,作者极力推荐自己的图书馆,这么好的图书馆怎么不打动他的外国朋友呢?

  【安徽卷】

  【试题回放】

  假设你是李华,作为选派的交流学生在美国某中学学习了一年,寄住在Mr. Brown家里,刚回到国内。回国后,你发现自己的一本英语词典遗忘在他家,因此给他写了一封信,请他帮助寄回词典。信的主要内容如下:

  感谢在美国期间他所提供的帮助

  一本英语词典忘记带回

  词典是美国老师送的,非常珍贵

  词典很可能丢在卧室的书架上

  邮资自己付

  注意:

  1、词数100左右;信的开头和结尾已为你写好。

  2、可适当增加细节,使行文连贯

  2、参考词汇:邮资-postage

  Dear Mr. Brown,

  I have been back, and write this letter to show my thanks. As the exchange student, you make me feel warm. Welcome to my country ,I’ll show you around in turn.

  However , there exists a problem that I have left my dictionary at your home. I like it very much , for it was a precious gift from my teacher who comes from the U.S. I guess that my book may stay on your shelf in the bedroom .

  Do you mind if you send my dictionary to me? I will pay for the postage and I’ll be very grateful if you show your warmness again.

  I’m eager to receive your reply.

  Yours,

  Li hua

  [名师点评]

  本文作为信件,首先其格式是正确的。既然是应用文,那么文章的意图就要明确表示出来,本文在表达作者写作意图的时候,情真意切,用词委婉而合理。文章不但使用了定语从句,还采用了疑问句,让句式变化而不呆板。

  【重庆卷】

  【试题回放】

  加拿大高中生David在互联网Internet上登出启事notice,希望结识一位中国朋友,以便学习中国的语言,文化culture。

  假设你是李华,请在看到这则启事后,用英文给David发一封电子邮件,主要内容包括:

  你怎样得知David的愿望

  你愿意成为他的朋友

  你打算如何帮助他

  你盼望他的回复

  注意:

  1、电子邮件的格式已为你写好

  2、字数:100词左右

  3、在答题卡上作答

  Dear David,

  I’m a student from China and have noticed your requirement on line. You would like to search for a Chinese friend to help you get to know China and its culture. Maybe I’m your good choice.

  China is a country that has a long history of 5,000 years. Not only our history ,but also our culture is the access to understand us better.

  There are so much that I want to know, if you are interested. I’ll be looking forward to your reply. I’ll show you around our great China if you come to China.

  Yours sincerely ,

  Li hua

  [名师点评]

  本文的语言非常流畅,我们可以看到,本文虽没有华丽的辞藻,但是语言的组织和层次感很强。同时连词的使用,如not only, but also ,让文章的重点突出,同时也起到了强调和吸引注意的目的。

  2005高考英语满分作文

  [全国卷I]

  【试题回放】

  假定你是李华,正是英国牛津参加短期语言培训,计划星期天去伦敦旅游。互联网上一则广告引起了你的注意,但一些具体信息不明确(箭头所指内容)。请给该旅行社发一封电子邮件,询问有关情况。

  注意:1.词数100左右,信的格式已为你写好。

  2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

  3.参考词汇:牛津——Oxford 费用——fee

  Dear Sir/Madame,

  I’m writing for more information about the day tour to London.

  As a student at Oxford University, I’d like to know if you have any special price for students. As for the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed? What about lunch? Is it included? Or do I need to bring along my own food?

  How long will the tour last? Since I need to prepare my lessons for the nest day, I’d like to know the time to return. Besides, is there any time for shopping? I really want to have a look at the big stores in London.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  本文是根据画面的提示来写一封电子邮件。作者在文章中首先把握了全部的要点,叙述较为完整;其次,作者运用一些过渡句和衔接词将文章串联,意思连贯。文章中采用了第一人称和一般现在时,这是值得肯定的地方。

  [全国卷Ⅲ](四川、云南、陕西等地区用)

  【试题回放】假设你是李华,最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是否应迁出市区。以下是你所在班级讨论的情况。请你给该报写一封信,反映讨论结果。

  赞成迁出:反对迁出:

  1.游客多,交通堵塞

  2.郊区环境好1.建于1906年,中外闻名

  2.搬迁易造成动物死亡

  注意:1.词数100字左右,信的开头已为你写好。

  2.可根据内容要点适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

  3.参考词汇: 郊区—suburb

  Dear Editor ,

  Recently ,in our class there has been a heated discussion about whether the Beijing Zoo should be moved out of the city . Some of my classmates are in favor of the move .They say large crowds of tourists to the zoo will result in traffic jams .They also say that once moved ,animals will have more space and better living conditions in the suburbs .However ,other students are against the idea ,saying that the Beijing Zoo, built in 1906 ,has a history of 100 years ,and is well –known at home and abroad .So it should remain where it is .What’s more ,moving may cause the death of some animals .To move or not ,this is a big decision which has to be made by people in Beijing.

  Yours truly,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  这篇文章写得还是比较精彩的。要点表达得完整而准确,清楚展示了主题。先提出了文章的主题,进而列出了赞成的观点及其相关的理由,同时在其后又给出了反面的观点,论据十分充足。文章结构严谨,前后连贯。

  【北京卷】

  【试题回放】

  第一节情景作文(20分)

  美国中学生jeff将要来你所在的红星中学学习中文,经协商安排住在你家。假设你是李华,请给Jeff写一封信,按照下图顺序介绍他来中国后的生活安排。

  注意:1. 信的开头已为你写好。

  2.词数不少于60。

  Dear Jeff,

  I’m Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. I’m very happy to learn that you’re going to stay with my family while you’re in Beijing.

  While you are here, we’ll provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk, a couple of chairs and a TV. You’ll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close to our home, so we could go to school together by bike. At noon we’ll eat at the school dining hall. I’m sure you’ll like the delicious Chinese food there, and enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming. It’ll be a lot of fun.

  If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. We’ll try our best to make your stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.

  Best wishes,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  这篇文章的特点还是比较清晰的,第一,作者根据图画将文章的要点概括完整,内容充实而丰富,结构紧凑,有层次感;第二,本文没有采用华丽的辞藻,但用词十分恰当,段落过渡自然,令人耳目一新。

  2004高考英语满分作文

  【全国卷I】

  【试题回放】

  假设你是李华,你在报上看到北京电视台今年七月将举办外国人“学中文,唱中文歌”才艺大赛。你的美国朋友Peter正在北京一所大学学中文,你觉得他应去试一试。请按以下要点给他写信告知此事,并表示可以提供帮助。

  比赛时间:7 月18日 。报名时间:截止到6月30日。报名地点:北京电视台

  注意:1.词数:100左右 2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯 3.参考词汇:才艺大赛—talent show

  Dear Peter,

  I read in a newspaper today that a “Learn Chinese, Sing Chinese Songs” Foreigners’ Talent Show will be held in Beijing Television Station on July 18. I know you like singing, and you are in Beijing during that period. I think this is a good chance for you to show your singing talent, and how well you’ve learned Chinese. If you would like to try, you' U have to go to the TV station to sign up before the end of June. If there is anything I can do for you, I would be more than glad to help.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  从整体上说,本文书写得简洁明快。语言简单平实,要点囊括齐全,结构完整。本文的主要特点是让步状语从句的使用,最后两句话,采用了if引导的让步状语从句,结合将来时使用。

  【全国卷II】

  【试题回放】

  假设你是李华,加拿大一所学校将于今年暑假组织学生来你校访问。其间,Andy Smith将借住你家。请你代表全家写信给Andy,欢迎他的到来,并告知有关事宜。信的要点如下:

  1. 上午:学校活动2.下午:游览市区3. 晚上:看电视,玩游戏,聊天

  注意:1. 词数:100左右2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯3. 参考词汇:安排arrange

  Dear Andy,

  I’m so glad that you’ll be here with me and my family for the summer holiday. I’m writing to express our warm welcome and introduce the activities during your stay here.

  In the morning ,some activities at school will be arranged. You’ll visit our classrooms, reading rooms, labs, and so on. We’ll take this opportunity to exchange our views, talking about school life, and so on.

  In the afternoon, you can tour around the city. And I’ll act as your tour guide. Our city has changed a lot and takes on a new look. You can see what is our city like with your own eyes.

  At night , we can watch TV, play games and talk about what we’re interested in. I’m sure you’ll enjoy yourself. I’m looking forward to your coming.

  Yours sincerely,

  Li hua

  [名师点评]

  本文行文自然流畅,文章要点齐全,意思表达真切。详略得当,重点突出。从语言使用的角度来说,不但使用了一些生动的动词,准确的名词,同时为了使本文串联自然,又使用了时间状语为连接词,将文章按照时间顺序叙述完整。

  [浙江卷]

  【试题回放】

  假设你是李越,你的加拿大笔友Steve来信说,他和他的一些同学正在学中文,请你推荐两本学中文的词典.根据下表提供的信息,请你给他写一封回信.

  英汉/汉英词典新华字典

  收词(字)18,000(英语)

  20,000(汉语)10,000

  价格52元11元

  特点大量例子、用法说明,适合初学者中国最常用的汉语字典

  参考词汇:

  · 推荐 recommend (V.)

  · 英汉/汉英词典 The English-Chinese Chinese-English Dictionary (ECCED)

  · 新华字典 Xinhua Dictionary (XD)

  Dear Steve,

  I’m so pleased to learn that you and your classmates are learning Chinese.

  I’d like to recommend the following two dictionaries.

  The English-Chinese/Chinese-English Dictionary is really a good one for beginners. It has 18,000 English words and 20,000 Chinese words. Besides plenty of examples, it has many notes telling you bow to use a word. Xinhua dictionary is the most popular Chinese dictionary , and it has a vocabulary of 10,000 words. It may also be useful to some advanced learners of Chinese. Of the two, ECCED is the more expensive, costing 52 yuan, and XD costs 11 yuan.

  Please let me know if you want me to buy these dictionaries.

  Yours,

  Li Yue

  [名师点评]本文要完成的是书信的主要部分,因此不需要注意格式,但是不能遗漏要点。本文要点齐全,内容完整,详略得到。介绍的时候,层次清晰,逐一举例。文章流畅而连贯。有很多关于词汇和字典的表述,值得我们积累。

  [广东卷]

  【试题回放】假设你是下图的李华。请根据图画所提供的信息,写一篇英语作文,描述昨天晚上邻居看足球赛影响你学习的情况,并描写你随后与邻居交涉的过程(如:你向邻居提出要求,对方向你表示歉意等。)

  注意:1. 词数:80—120

  2. 可以编写对话或其它叙述方式描写你与邻居的交涉过程

  About 9 o'clock last night, I was doing my homework. Suddenly I heard my neighbor shouting and laughing loudly. He was watching a football game on TV. I couldn't go on studying and became impatient. I covered my ears, trying to keep the noises out, but failed. So I had to go my neighbor.

  I knocked at his door and said," Good evening, Mr. Yang! Could you please turn down your TV a bit? I am doing my homework.'

  “Oh, I'm really sorry to have disturbed you. We'll do as you say.” My neighbor said politely.

  “Thank you very much..” I said and went back to continue my study.

  [名师点评]

  这篇文章从整体上来看,内容完整,要点齐全。在准确领悟题意的基础上,用平实的语言,将文章娓娓道来,连贯而流畅。句式搭配长短结合。文章对对话的描写,很生动,让人有种身临其境的感觉。

  【英语各档次的给分范围和要求】

  第五档(很好);(21-25分)

  1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

  2. 覆盖所有内容要点。

  3. 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。

  4. 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误,但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;具备较强的语言运用能力。

  5. 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

  6. 完全达到了预期的写作目的。

  第四档(好):(16-20分)

  1. 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

  2. 虽漏掉1、2个次重点,但覆盖所有主要内容。

  3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

  4. 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确,些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。

  5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。

  6. 达到了预期的写作目的。

  第三档(适当):(11-15分)

  1. 基本完成了试题规定的任务。

  2. 虽漏掉一些内容,但覆盖所有主要内容。

  3. 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

  4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,但不影响理解。

  5. 应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。

  6. 整体而言,基本达到了预期的写作目的。

  第二档(较差):(6-10分)

  1. 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

  2. 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容,写了一些无关内容。

  3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

  4. 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解。

  5. 较少使用语句间的连接成分,内容缺少连贯性。

  6. 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。

  第一档(差):(1-5分)

  1. 未完成试题规定的任务。

  2. 明显遗漏主要内容,写了一些无关内容,原因可能是未理解试题要求。

  3. 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

  4. 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响对写作内容的理解。

  5. 缺乏语句间的连接成分,内容不连贯。

  6. 信息未能传达给读者。

  不得分:(0分)


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