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2004-2009高考英语满分作文及名师评析(1)
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2009高考英语满分作文

  【全国卷I海南、宁夏】

  【试题回放】假定你是李华,正在英国接受英语培训,住在一户英国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs. Wilson 不在家,你准备外出,请给Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条,内容包括:

  1.外出购物

  2.替房东还书

  3.Tracy 来电话留言:1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)见面取消

  2)此事已告知Susan

  3) 尽快回电

  注意:1. 词数100左右;

  2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

  Mrs. Wilson,

  I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  本文属于提纲式要点作文,是学生比较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性,生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确,各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开门见山。

  【北京卷】

  【试题回放】情景作文

  假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为响应绿化祖国的号召,你班四月十二日去郊区植树,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,介绍植树活动的全过程,给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。

  注意:词数不少于60

  提示词:郊区 suburbs

  April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.

  【名师点评】

  本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文,与环保结合,立意较好。文章思路清晰,要点连贯,在语言的表达上选词新颖,同时运用了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达。

  【北京卷】

  【试题回放】开放作文

  请根据下面提示,写一篇短文,词数不少于50

  In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

  What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.

  【名师点评】

  本文是开放性作文,要求考生把握好图画内容,发散表达。考生重点要看出这个人是卷发高鼻的外国人,要体会到西式刀叉对中式食物的矛盾性。行文结构十分明晰,同时句式使用得熟练而准确。

  【江苏卷】

  【试题回放】鼠标是计算机时代最佳的人机交互工具之一。它极大地方便了人们的计算机操作。但是,过分依赖鼠标的习惯也会带来一些不利影响。请你以鼠标为切入点,根据下表所提示的信息,用英语写一篇短文。

  鼠标的必要性对多数人来说,操作计算机,上网冲浪……

  鼠标的便捷性点击、移动、插入、拷贝、删除……编辑文本,搜索信息……

  收发邮件,选购商品……

  点播音乐,下载电影……

  如果过分依赖鼠标…… (请考生结合自身感受,列举两到三点)

  注意:

  1.对所给要点逐一陈述,适当发挥,不要简单翻译。

  2.词数150左右。开头已经写好,不计人总词数。

  3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。

  The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.

  For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.

  A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.

  【名师点评】本文为提纲式说明文体裁,所选内容与我们生活相关,考生只要把所给要点逐条陈述,适度发挥,不要逐条翻译即可。文章说理清楚,语言流畅,句式表达多样,用词恰当、准确。不失为一篇满分作文。

  2008高考英语满分作文

  【全国卷】

  【试题回放】假定你是李华,从小喜爱大熊猫(panda),一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封信:

  1、 自我介绍;2、 祝贺苏琳生日;3、 感谢工作人员;4、 索取苏琳三岁生日照。

  注意:1、词数100左右;2、可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3、开头语已为你写好。

  例文:

  Dear Sir/Madam,

  Greetings from China!

  I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

  By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.

  Yours truly,

  Li Hua

  【名师点评】本文写作的内容要点如下:

  1.自我介绍;2.信息来源;3.祝贺生日;4.感谢照顾;5.索取照片;6.合适的结尾。

  这封信格式正确,行文规范,描述有条不紊,称呼、正文中的开头及结尾、结束语均表达到位。文章行文活泼,感情真挚,语言表述准确,洋溢着作者因大熊猫得到精心照顾而对美方人员的感激之情,以及希望自己愿望成真,得到照片的希冀之情。长短句运用合理,结合了简单句和复合句,流畅自然,不露痕迹,的确是一篇佳作。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1.delighted adj.欣喜的,快乐的 2.express v.表达 3.give birth to v.产生,生育

  好句I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

  我祝福它生日快乐并且对你们的辛勤工作表达我的感激之情,正是你们的努力工作让苏琳和它的父母在美国过着幸福和健康的生活。

  评析:定语从句的使用。

  【北京卷】

  【试题回放】假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。 请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

  注意: 词数不少于60.

  提示词: 游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin

  Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

  The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.

  We were tired but happy.

  【名师点评】

  本情景作文的内容要点如下:1.讨论;2.爬山;3.检拾别人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。内容要点可用不同方式表达。本文覆盖了所有内容要点,较好地完成了试题规定的任务。其中,写作主题突出,详略得当,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇,而且有效的使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文机构紧凑。本文叙述清楚,描写细致,准确运用了很多富有表现力的词和句型,例如:“set off early”,“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等,将活动的情形很形象地描述了出来。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1 set off 出发 2. litter n.废弃物 3.respectively adv.分别地

  好句1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .

  在爬山时,我们享受着温暖的阳光和美丽的风景。

  1. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.

  然而,当我们登上山顶,被眼前的一幕惊呆了:瓶子和香蕉皮这样的废弃物到处都是。

  评析:细节描写,生动形象。“shock”一词也用得生动传神。

  【江苏卷】

  【试题回放】实现有效的沟通,建立良好的人际关系,不仅要善于言表,更要学会倾听。请你根据下表中所提供的信息,写一篇题为 “Being a Good Listener” 的英文演讲稿。

  为何倾听表示尊重,增进理解,建立良好的人际关系

  谁来倾听家长倾听孩子理解孩子,消除代沟,……

  老师倾听学生了解学生,满足需求,……

  同学相互倾听增进友谊,互帮互学,……

  怎样倾听(请考生联系自己拟定内容,列举两至三点。)

  注意:

  1、 对所给要点,逐一陈述,适当发挥,不要简单翻译。

  2、 词数150左右。开头和结尾已经写好,不计入总词数。

  3、 演讲稿中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。

  Good afternoon, everyone.

  The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.

  Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.

  Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

  What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.

  Thank you for your listening!

  【名师点评】

  这是一篇感情真挚、热情洋溢的演讲稿,文中大量运用排比句型,不但准确流畅地表达出题目中所提供的信息,而且体现出作者熟练运用英语的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同结构的复合句式,将倾听的对象及其作用阐述得淋漓尽致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句议论应如何倾听,则更进一步地增强了这篇演说稿的说服力。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1.promote v .促进 2. interpersonal adj.人际的3. generation gap. 代沟

  4. open-minded adj. 虚心的

  好句1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.

  同学之间应该互相倾听,这样他们可以互相学习和帮助,也会形成友谊。

  评析:复杂句的组合,被动句的使用。

  2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.

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